~ Construct a variety of sentences (simple, compound and complex) to connect and express ideas
~ Use a range of language features (e.g adjectives, adverbs emotive language, similes) to engage a reader and add specific detail to support a point of view
Students have been successful with these learning intentions by:
~ Experimenting and taking risks with their writing
~ Using our sentence wall for ideas and clarification
~ Listening to quality literature and identifying what makes us engaged as the audience
Some examples of students work have been provided to demonstrate our learning so far. We listened to Jackie French’s book, ‘Flood’ and ‘Fire’ as well as some ANZAC texts to help generate our own ideas.
We also reflected on why it is important to have strong writing skills and knowledge of sentences.:
“It helps you for your future”
“It’s important to express yourself”
“It makes you think, imagine and be excited”
“ To be able to build a powerful resume”
“You use writing skills in all careers”
“You learn to be creative”
“You learn skills that help you express ideas and how to talk”
“Teaches how to express yourself”
All students have shown great improvement early in the year and I look forward to students developing their skills further.
The big red river of fire makes buildings fall down into a red ocean and makes it spreads like a tsunami. The fire travels over mountains while 37 helicopters and 3 planes can’t stop it. As farm land homes get demolished, people try to escape but not everyone makes it out alive. People run and drive to get out of the way of the moving red wall. Fire fighters try to think of ways to stop the beastly tsunami, while people run for their lives.
~ Tyson
On a cold saddened day, heavy rain hits gradually drenching the ground in seconds. Water is soon filling the streets, while waves begin crashing at the shore, guiding the biggest wave of all. It sends water everywhere that destroys people’s needs. The feel of the ice, cold water sends shivers through your body making you believe you have hypothermia. A scream for help echoes through town, meanwhile we are all trapped inside our homes full of fear. As soon as night comes, people search the water for lives that are as equally important as the heroes searching. No one feared to sleep as a result of waves crashing against homes and the cries of help.
~ William
Skies are grey. The rain is on its way. Rain pours down on the dry ground although it’s soaking the water up like a sponge, therefore the water will spread through the town like a river, destroying everything in its path. While the community flees, the flood begins to bleed through the homes and trees, yet the rain has stopped, the river like flood still flows through the town. After days and days the flood has slowly disappeared, now the clean-up must begin. Helping hands there for people that are in need despite what has been lost, day after day, week after week the land is now sweet.
~ Caitlin
A bushfire can begin by people lighting them on purpose, not putting the coal out properly but most bushfires start by bright devastating lightning strikes. As soon as it hits the trees, sparks light everything. After the fire ends, there’s a pitch, black sky filled with thick, black smoke. When the fire is over, all the beautiful trees turn to ash but not all is lost. The burnt trees have dropped seeds that grow back but some things don’t start a new life.
~ Curtis
The mothers, wives and children fill the lane with tears as the fellow soldiers sail away. When the ANZAC’s arrive on the rocky shore of Gallipoli, the Turkish spot them from a mile away. The Turkish fearfully grab their guns, helmets and uniforms and get ready for the fight. The ANZAC’S slowly climb up the soggy hill. The first gun shot and the first man went down. The Turkish obnoxiously shot our men down.
~ Willow
As the chalky, horrible, innocent leaves fall to the naked ground in disappointment, they disappear forever. The trees get lighter and lighter, and all of a sudden there are no beautiful trees left alive. The fire gets closer and closer to the disappointed family. The little boy watches all of his perfect memories vanish and his toys going to waste. There is nothing left to see other than the burnt house so the sad family leaves. The dogs bark as they leave, while watching the house for the last time in tears. The little girl waves good bye to everything she ever loved.
~ Jazzelle
